- Yet another excellent chapter. Keep spoiling us. I love the game!
Author's responseThanks as always. By using this perspective, I am hoping by the end of the story to have one of the most developed and believable versions of "Harry" out there. I am very happy with the way dodgespell turned out. I am a little biased, but I would rather play this than quidditch. I am honestly surprised no one has come up with something like it before. With any luck, it will be used by other authors and become a lasting contribution to fanfiction. Jim
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2006-08-28Dodgespell is great! If I ever decide to use it, I'll credit you and send you a message about it. Very generous of you to share, though people would probably steal it anyway.
I really like Karina. I know Harry's thing with her is temporary, and that he's rapidly developing strong feelings for Luna, but I still dig the status quo.
Author's responseAgain, I am happy with the way the game came off. Sounds loads better than flying around on a broom. Originally, the tournament was going to be in this one, with people getting banished into the wards and bouncing back into the court, like one giant hockey body check. However the chapter was getting long and I decided to put that in next chapter after I guage the reaction everyone has to this sport.
As for Karina, hopefully she has escaped being a Mary Sue. She's a sackbuddy for now and they are both openly admitting that they are using each other for now. One of the things that usually drives me up the wall, is when author's have Harry go into 'woe is me' mode. In this one, he glosses over his upbringing and simply says 'yeah it was bad, but I am trying to put it in the past.' This doesn't affect his inner monologue about how people are screwing with him right now, nor change some of his snarky comments to Bill.
Next chapter may actually introduce Hack the troll.
(#) ZanyMuggle 2006-08-28"No, silly my new favorite game is 'innocent young man gets corrupted by very sexy woman'"
Nice. Very nice. I love this story.
I am enthralled with the Harry/Karina relationship, as it is a real need-based relationship than the fantasy realm "luv"-based relationship. Or even worse, the "soul bond" relationship. Very well written.
Author's responseGlad you enjoyed the chapter. Harry is currently living the dream with a nice looking older woman. Unfortunately like most dreams, he is probably due for a wake up call. Jim
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