- I'm sure I've mentioned this before, but this story is fantastic! You've really captured the essence of the characters here, and the clash of their ideals. It feels like a side story that could have easily been slipped into the series--everything's perfectly in character, and you've got just the right mix of somber and silly to match Trigun's atmosphere.
I noticed one little error on this readthrough, though: /but a young widower kept me a bit longer after her husband's funeral/. Since a widower is male, I'd assume Wolfwood meant to say "widow." :-P
Author's responseThank you so much! I've edited it to fix that. If you catch anything else, feel free to let me know!
(#) KouenTaisa 2005-12-28AWESOME! cries But so sad! I really loved the last line, about him having faith in Vash and his damned doughnuts. I think that's something everyone can have faith in. grins This was an awesome story and it lent a lot of insight as well, keep up the good work!
- That was excellent. You effortlessly caught the way things are between Nicholas and Vash, and how quickly they fluctuate. I really liked the last line, and Nicholas' instinctive, emotional understanding that he won't ever figure Vash out, and he just has to take Vash on faith.
One note on punctuation g - names (and nicknames) need to be set off by commas when directly addressing someone in dialogue. For example: "Thanks Tongari" should be punctuated: "Thanks, Tongari." You've done it correctly in some parts of the story, but not consistently. Just a heads up. :)
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