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Harry Potter: Voiishima's Last Wish
(#) AnnF 2006-10-18
Story might be easier for readers if this chapter was before the first. A beta would greatly help your story. for example "both of them breathing heaving" I think you meant heavily instead of heaving. Lots of little typos.
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