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- Not a bad effort. I liked it, although I felt that it's bordering on cliche. That may be unavoidable with the theme, though.
Check your "you're" use. In the second to last stanza, they should be "your".
Author's responseHa ha yeah it was kinda intentional cliche. I don't really know anybody even close to the description infact I think I even made it from the opposite sex's view. And thnx for pointing out the you're/your thing. Outside readers often catch things the author doesn't.
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