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Heart of the Warrior Book II
1 reviewTMNT 2003/Harry Potter AU Crossover. Sequel to Book 1, so read that first. Harry's second year at Hogwarts is filled with mysterious attacks, where he is the prime suspect. More complete summary in...
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Heart of the Warrior Book II
(#) AnthonyR224 2008-09-24
has potential, but desperately neede to work on your dialogue for the bad guys as well as your vocabulary. for example at one point in the story you have harry say im fine, then add, not sounding fine at all. that makes it sound like a book for a 5 year old. it would have been better if you said "Im fine" harry said despondently, for example, instead.
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