Cloud brings sad tidings to Elmyra.
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This could stand to be fleshed out a bit more. The readers already know what Cloud is going to say. They don't know how Elmyra will react. Try focusing on that.
Personally, I loved it. Short and sweet and to the point. That's not a bad thing! Perfect how it is. I look forward to reading more from you.
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