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Patrick spots her from across the bar. Is fate knocking down his door?
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Cloak and Dagger
(#) whatkatydid 2006-11-15
CRYSTAL - ALEX.
SUCK DAT!!!
I wanted ot be the first, ok this is getting a little childish because I haven't even put together a proper review yet, oh well, just means I'll have to do another one later....
I love Wren - she's the shizzle. And this story has alcohol in it - I'm totally satisfied.....
You're doing amazing things with your writing and thanks for sharing it with us. I appreciate it, no how hard it is to put story's together etc.
Anyhow's, enough of my ShullBit for now.
LATER SUCKERS!!!! Sticks tongue outAuthor's response
I would hand out prizes to those of you who are the first reviewers of each chapter, but you all seem to get so much joy out of it a prize would be pointless.
I'm enjoying Wren's character as well. And I love that you used shizzle. Sa-Weet. OH! And I love love love martinis! MMMMM. Satisfaction guarenteed.Cloak and Dagger
(#) thexrealxme 2006-11-15
great story... i'm really excited to keep reading!
all of the characters are caught really well and dead on with personalities. yay! :)Author's response
Thanks so much for the review. And I enjoy your stories as well!Cloak and Dagger
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-15
Alright, to my defense I have to say that I had two options this morning before I had to leave for school:
1) read the new chapter
2) take a shower
UNFORTUNATELY I chose the second one. It probably made me smell a bit nicer but it sure as hell didn´t quite have the same humorous and stimulating (does that sound STRANGE to somebody else?) effect as this amazing chapter did.
Me loves because
a) it´s fucking hilarious (Pete and Patrick being silly, Joe being... Joe and Andy is in it too ;) ),
b) Wren and CoCo are hilarious too,
c) you have such a talent for thinking of little details to present picture-perfect scenes to us,
d) your choice of words and your syntax show that you don´t just type this up without thinking much (unlike this FrostedGlass person)... and if you do, then I would like to fix some tutoring lessons with you,
e) because I didn´t burn myself when reading this (goddamn shower).
On a further note: HA! I was still faster than Crystal. ;)Author's response
I think choosing option 2 over option 1 was a good idea. Smelling is never a good thing.
I loves your reviews because you motivate me to continue to write. Thanks! And I'm glad that my story didn't burn you like your shower.Cloak and Dagger
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-11-15
okay, i realize i'm lacking on my review speed. i got a crown today (not the pretty tiara ones, the ones that dentists give you) and i feel like utter shit. this chapter gets total kudos for making me forget about my mouth for ten minutes. i love you for that.
and major kudos to Patrick for taking the lead on this one and going after the girl. he's totally falling for her. gah. i love it.
even bigger kudos to you for being a genius. i think it was a good move to make it known that both Wren and Collette know who Fall Out Boy is. the i'm-not-sure-who-they-are-but-I-wanna-find-out approach has been done too many times.
yes, i do find it STRANGE that alex showers. was that the question?Author's response
Bummer on the whole going to the dentist thang. That's never a fun time.
Thanks for all the kudos! I would hardly say that I'm a genius, however.Cloak and Dagger
(#) Tawney 2006-12-20
This chapter was hilarious! I saw you'd updated and thought id have a read and im so glad i did! Im going to read the whole thing but this chapter in particular make me laugh out loud! It's just so true to life, the whole back in secondary school thing! Brilliant! XX
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