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I changed it a bit. To me it seems more like a chanting to me, still. But I do like it alot and hope you do too.
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I Grip The Rails
(#) xXxMetalHeadxXx 2006-11-30
that was very wonderful.
i dont kno how else to describe it.
it was just so.....good. haunting! that is what i wanted to day! haunting! your poem was hauntingAuthor's response
thank you soooo much for the review :DI Grip The Rails
(#) WynonaKing90 2006-11-30
i know it is supposed to be chanting, but it is a little too repetitive. Although, your words are amazing. they really make me feel.Author's response
repetitive, as in the:'i grip the rails' part?
you think it should be shorter... or?I Grip The Rails
(#) lizards_love 2006-12-06
Wow! i loved this! it was apsolute perfection! so original! will you write me one about love and death? sorry to ask, but yours are so good!I Grip The Rails
(#) jackskellington 2008-03-27
i thought it was gonna start scary because of the first line, but then as i continued reading it...WOW
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