- I think this is very well written considering the difficulty of the subject of the chapter especially.
The first part is covered over with ominousness for me although it is so pleasant and light-hearted because I know what is coming. The contrast is, I think, effective.
The description of the pyreflies entering Nooj's body is suitably terrifying. The return of Nooj's usual emotions is awful and depressing, even if it seems a little inevitable.
I feel that Nooj's confusion is well-written and much more effective than it might be in another narrative because he is always so logical and the reader definitely knows it by now.
I am only confused about whether or not Nooj tried to attack his team mates. If he did they same rather sanguine about it all.
At any rate, it is a well-written chapter in which I could really feel Nooj's terror at losing control.
Author\'s Response: Thank you for the positive words in the midst of your moving turmoil.Nooj has no recollection of his attacking his teammates. His mind was not his own at the time. Later, the details of that part may become more clear - truthfully, that is the province of my collaborators in the grand scheme. It is not easy to remember who did what and with which and to whom.
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