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While You Were Sleeping
4 reviewsHarry has a nighttime visitor, who gives a little and takes a little. *Reformatted*
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Family Issue
(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2007-02-17
Well, let's be critical for a moment. This chapter was well written and even had a bit of a poetic start. The worst that I can say is that it was was too short. If you're going to write smut, be very descriptive as the male population that read this want to be more able to visualize your goal. What does she look like? How large are her breasts. Does she still look worn from years in Azkaban, etc. I'm off to the next chapter.
Geovanni Luciano
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