Categories > Celebrities > My Chemical Romance > Theres A Secret In The Air
How we met
3 reviewsFrank has a girlfriend named Sam they have been dateing for over 2 year there in love. But sam has a shocking secrets how will frank and the rest of his bandmates/Friends react to sams horrifying s...
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Theres A Secret In The Air
(#) lady_venom_x 2007-01-27
Okay. You have a excellent story idea, but you need to work on a few things.
First, grammar. Grammar is very important. Spelling, formatting, paragraphing. Stuff like that.
Second, detail. Your story left some blanks. For your next chapters, read over what you have multiple times and add in things if you think they're going to draw a blank.
Like I said, I think you have a great story idea, and I will read on. But please, try to work on these things. If you need assistance, my email is on my profile page.
:)Theres A Secret In The Air
(#) lisa_mw_0189 2007-02-01
Ha now that the spelling's better thanks to the help of a friend cough cough your welcome cough it's good.... now I just gotta read the rest and see what you messed up... one word of advice
CAPITALIZATION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
LOL
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