- will we get to see more on the slytherin homefront? i hope Alex trains Draco. Cant wait for the next chapter.
Author's responseMaybe not Slytherin in specific. But we will hear update of what is happening across the pond. This next chapter will be one of the most difficult because it will be in Alex/Edward point of view. Edward is hard enough to write by himself, but to have him somewhow coexist with Alex will definitely be a challenge.
- "hadn't of been" is another example of dodgy grammar. The 'of' should be 'have', except that I don't think 'have' is needed there either.
I notice that you can't spell quidditch - I can't spell it myself either, so I always check when using it. ;-)
As for the story, in a way I think you may have been better not splitting up into two threads but leaving Hogwarts alone until (unless) Draco returns. We'll have to see how it goes I suppose.
"The ghost" appears to be both Malfoy and muggle-born - presumably that paradox will be cleared up later?
One final point - when you switch viewpoints it often takes a fair while before we know _whose_ viewpoint it is. I suggest adding a note when switching like ...
* Hermione, Hogwarts Express *
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