(#) ZanyMuggle 2007-02-01That may well have been one of the most insightful scenes with Arthur Weasley that I've ever read. I especially liked the parting hint at his 'true' power.
I am a very Harry-ocentric reader, yet I find your Weasleys more compelling than any other supporting characters I've read. As much as you 'stick to the facts', you still add so much depth and thought into them.
Excellent work! Thanks for writing!
Author's responseI'm glad you're enjoying the story. Arthur's first moment was an interesting problem. How would you feel were you in his shoes? Rather conflicted, I suspect. All of Part I is primarily from Harry's PoV, and is therefore Harry centric. However, I'm trying hard to develop the other characters as "real" while keeping that focus. I'm glad some people seem to appreciate the effort. So many stories paint characters rather cartoonesh in my opinion, which is unkind to them. They all have so much potential if you'll just project a bit. Of course, the drawback is you wind up with 200k words for 11 days of life, but... good with the bad, right?
- Very compelling chapter. Those "interviews" with McGonagall and Mr Weasley were facinating. I'm always struck how Ginny is so much like her mother.
Though I was expecting a dragon, but that description of Norman was pricelss. I guess Harry is going get whats coming but that was a cliffie, so you're not certain how this prank is going to turn out.
Author's responseYou know, I think I'm going to have to keep a log of which site you leave your reviews on. Tracking the user names and sites as a pattern might just reveal something interesting. Then again, it might just reveal I need more sleep. It just has this feel, though, like you're trying to pay me back for dragging out the list of questions that come up in Echoes and barely throwing any answers out. Damn, my paranoia is acting up again.
I'm glad people are appreciating those interviews. They were hard to write, to put the right "feel" on, and the final version is pretty good in my opinion. A few spots still feel flat to me, but then I'm probably always going to be overly critical.
The Skrewt should have come as a surprise, although if you read the other stories I've done, maybe not that much of a surprise. I can't imagine JKR let such a fun creature just ... disappear. Watch out for the next chapter, it has more fun with Thestrals, too.
And for your closing line... well, yes, actually, I do know how that little prank plays out. So do my betas. They've known for weeks. You, however, may not :) As for a cliffie... now really, no one was unconscious, no one was dying, and no one was alone. That's got to be a pretty mild one, right?
- I just found this story, and I've spent the afternoon reading it straight through. I've been riveted. I love the characterizations, the interactions, and especially the backstory. You've handled every detail perfectly. I love your portrayal of Neville, especially - I really appreciate a strong Neville. Great job. This one goes in my favorites.
Author's responseI'm glad you're enjoying the story. It's a bit long to read in one marathon session, isn't it? Of course, part of that length is my effort to not make the characters cookie-cutter templates with interchangeable lines of dialog. Thanks for the feedback.
(#) Europhobia 2007-02-06I love this story, but I believe your Beta-team are correct. It seems to me that you have grown so fond of using small, tiny pointers, and plot-forwarders (in lack of words), that you have missed something rather essential:
You put them in, because to YOU, they are intriguing and small, seemingly forgetting that YOU know the plot and will spot them emmediately yourself. See, we readers do not know the plot, unless we get those pointers. Myself, I LOVE small pointers and intelligent fics, but I still want the bigger ones every once in a while, so that the plot has an obvious feeling of moving forward... Not only that - imagine what you could hide, if you gave us several plot-parts at once, creating overload of info, and then hid the miniscule, but ever-so-important ones among those?
I also think it's time to move forward in the story... you're not even at the end of September, apparently, while the readers (at least mine and my fiance's) internal clocks say it should be Halloween or Christmas soon. There's no shame in time-jumping.
My regards to your Beta-team aswell. Consider yourself lucky, you seem to have a good circle around you. This is usually very hard to achieve!
Cheers, and well done!
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