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Individuality
23 reviewsAfter hearing the prophecy, Harry realizes he has three options: join Voldemort, be Dumbledore's pet or be himself, an individual. It all begins with a package of letters, an invitation of King Rag...
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The Chieftain
(#) Dragen 2007-02-05
What a great start to the story, so Harry has decided to use the Dark Arts to win.
I love the latter that Harry got from Sirius, and the idea of the Dark Ritual, which would make Harry his son.
I like that Harry is becoming friends with Daphne and Tracy... and now dating them both. He also told the two girls about the prophecy. WoW... Harry is the Heir of Slytherin, nice.
So is Harry going to have more girlfriends then Daphne and Tracy. I hope so, as it could be good.The Chieftain
(#) anglosaxon 2007-02-05
tht was a good twist to the inheritance things... well the slytherins were a bit forward in approching harry i feel but it ended up well...
update fast...The Chieftain
(#) djo 2007-02-05
good start - looks like lots of Dumble bashing ahead; I like it ;-))The Chieftain
(#) AberforthsAvatar 2007-02-05
This is quite an original beginning. I am looking forward to where you'll take this. Thanks for sharing it with us.The Chieftain
(#) theCaitiff 2007-02-05
I like the story, but it needs some polish to really be good. Your phrasing and syntax is atrocious, is english not your native language?
Tracy and Daphne are interesting but I think things are moving a bit too fast.
Whatever you do please avoid the knockturn alley/trunk/pensieve/time turner shopping spree cliche. Have the girls get him some nice clothes, and maybe a portkey charm bracelet for safety but leave the cliched, recycled plotlines at the door.The Chieftain
(#) kcgx23 2007-02-06
Great starting chapter, What was in the letter, I know he's the Slytherin Heir, but how did he become Tom Riddle's son? Please update soon.
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