- The ending was especially engaging. The scene with her making and looking at the scrapbook was a beautiful piece of writing.
However the story seems to loose focus when your describing the memories. It's very hard to pinpoint why I felt it lost focus as it is a very well written story. Try to add some more emotional connection to those parts so we can understand why she would think back to these specific moments.
Author's responseI've had similar feedback before, and re-reading it I understand where you're coming from. I wanted to show what the objects were part of, but I guess I didn't show why they were important to her. Thank you for reviewing.
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