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For Him I Would Die
5 reviewsThe Sequel to "A Promise To Keep". (Yes, I know I said there would be no sequel...) Naruto had craved adventure. He had missed the excitment. Now a mission of grave importance has found its way i...
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For Him I Would Die
(#) Entilzah 2007-03-16
An excellent start.
The beginning was a little confusing, but I believe that was per design. It was all made clear as the story progressed. It actually was a pretty good way to start the story.
As a relatively new father myself, the story definitely tugs at the heartstrings. Big time. You did an excellent job of setting up an aura of tension and despair in the appropriate places. And the scene of announcing the birth had just the right elements of joy, surprise, and things-not-going-according-to-plan that made it entire appropriate for the world setting you have created.
I typically am not a big Angst fan, so it will be interesting to see if I can remain as totally enthralled with this story as I usually am with your other ones. But if you need to write Angst, then Write Away!
And a minor detail... in order to make the timeframe work a little more smoothly, you might want to change the flashback timeframes. It is unlikely Hintata can go from hiding "Morning" Sickness to giving birth in 20 weeks.Author's response
Yeah, I caught the time frame mistake this morning when I woke up. Maybe I shouldn't wait until 2am to submit a story, huh? ;)
The angst will be minimal this time, but I listed it just in case.For Him I Would Die
(#) ronintoturi 2007-03-17
thank you so much for continuing "promise". this one has so much potential and i cant wait for the next update.For Him I Would Die
(#) Astrid 2007-03-18
ahhh >,< why why! must naruto's life be so full of strif and pain its just wrong (crying) poor hinata and naruto this situation must really make him feel just like the yodaime (spelling!) great start thought, hope to read more soon
ja ne!Author's response
I pose a question: If I didn't torment Naruto and Hinata, would you still read my story? ;) They get plenty of joy, too, don't forget. (Marriage, kid, gaining respect, achieving life-long dreams, etc.)For Him I Would Die
(#) demonkunoichikonoha9 2008-02-04
omgosh! thats sad. so whats going to happen to neji and tenten?
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