(#) Wallwalker 2005-05-07Ha, this amuses me greatly. I can so feel for Irvine ("Eww, sea bugs!") and the last line cracks me up - and Quistis might not be immune to him but I love the way she makes light of him in this. It's very good - even the summary makes me laugh.
- I don't know why I'm posting a review when I can't give you a lick of helpful critique. The rhythm, the details, the perfect characterizations, the dialogue: so expert, it's a pity Square doesn't hire you to make their characters a little more individual! Yet it sounds just like them. Tiny touches like the bet Irvine lost, and Quistis rolling up the window on his fingers, are so real and so true. I envy and admire your writing; you make it all look easy. Crabs! Heh.
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