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Anti-alcohol works wonders
1 reviewAnti-alcohol does work wonders...how on Earth do we live without it?
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Jimmy and Crykit
(#) facia 2007-05-15
A more involved plot than last chapter, good! It might be helpful to make sure to name people more often, though: the storekeeper doesn't need a name for his short part, but the king's pretty important. You've also got a couple more times where you have extra capitals - make sure you proofread carefully!
I got into the beer," She laughed
the black dragon," The old
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