Categories > Books > Harry Potter > Brother Z
(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2007-06-29In reading this chapter it provides the ground work for the destruction of Severus Snape and I certainly hope that you provide a clear reason why YOUR Albus Dumbledore still has faith in him from the great beyond. I like your introduction of Dian and I hope that you continue this story for a bit, showing her to be a part of the story. I also would hope that you introduce the other two children, as well. Your stories are always filled with political intrigue and while this one hasn't, it hasn't disappointed in the direction you've taken it, thus far.
(#) Meteoricshipyards 2007-06-29Good chapter. I can only wish JKR would force Dumbledore to answer those questions, but I have no hope that she will.
Glad that whatever he's attempting isn't going to work.
Harry's daughter seems interesting. Is she going to have a bigger role in later chapters?
Thanks for the chapter.
- Hmm, Hermione is getting a bit snippy. Not that anyone can blame since she is fully justified in her stance. It is just an amusing shift from her being one of Dumbledore's greatest supports in canon, to acknowledging his falibility, to condemning him for his errors in trust and judgement.
I like how you are weaving Dian into the plot and I really appreciate the sublty that Snape is trying to use in getting his revenge. It also allows the suspense of it to build slowly through the remainder of the story.
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2007-06-29Good to see that Dumbledore's portrait stays true to form. I liked the meeting with Dian, but she didn't really have any distinguishing characteristics. It takes time to develop a character, but she really did seem a bit bland.
Can't wait to see what you've got in store for Snape...
- snicker I loved the title of this chapter (just had to poke fun at PC "children's writing", didn't you? not that I mind, it deserves it and the title fits the chapter well). It appears that most parts of Zed/Harry's life are starting to fit together, though I'm sure there'll be a few more rocky patches, yet. I see I was right in thinking that Snape was underestimating Zed; 'twill be interesting to see his final efforts, and what ends up happening.
- Outstanding chapter!!!! I love the ending where Hermione was berating Dumbledore for being an idiot and thinking Snape is worth saving or the air he breathes. I can't wait to read what happens in the next chapter. I get this feeling that Snape may meet a sticky end and possibly be killed for being the the scum sucking pussbag we all know he is!! Do keep up the outstanding work and update soon please:):):):)
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