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• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) Innortal 2007-07-09

  Well done, very interesting, and funny as well. I can't wait to see what you add next.

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) whatareyouevensaying 2007-07-09

  Pretty good update, I must say. I'm never a supporter of pimp canes, but when one is depriving Lucius Malfoy, all is forgiven.

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  (#) DandJlover 2007-07-09

  Great job! THis is getting really underhand! And I enjoy it a lot! I just hope Harry doesn't go TOO crazy with power! Can't wait to hear more!

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  (#) happyreader 2007-07-09

  I do enjoy your story.
  would it be hard to fix the following paragraph from chapter five to have Vernon work at Grunnings instead of Gringotts ?
  "Vernon sprang to his feet, this was too good to be true. The financial backer must have heard of all of his years of distinguished service at Gringotts and was going to give him everything that he deserved. Vernon knocked on the door of Meeting Room Three."

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) kerrde06 2007-07-09

  Loved Vernon getting sacked, please update soon.

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) Cateagle 2007-07-10

  Laughs uproariously Oh, that is most definitely getting to be a twisted timeline. I love what's happening to poor (NOT!) Lucius and Vernon and I can't wait to see what happens when Remus joins up with Boss Potter and Sirius. Now, dealing with the Zabini's could get to be a bit more problematical, but there's always room to work things out.

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) Anaknisatanas 2007-07-10

  Shot on sight, brilliant! I loved how Harry fired Vernon. Getting a look at Madame Zabini was interesting. I really want to know if she'll succeed in turning Blaise into a boy. I also loved the bit with Lucius getting tossed into a cell. And he has no more pimp cane laughs I love this story, it's great.

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  (#) Cocoa_girl 2007-07-10

  Any chance Harry can Marry Blaise before her mother changes her into a boy? Just think Potter and Zabini fortunes and businesses they could rule Europe. I do wonder if Harry's employee niece is Hermione? I hope that Harry will have a family day to show how much he appreciates his employees and to promote family time. And in the event that any Zabini were to try and kill Harry all of the money in mom and pop Zabini vaults were to go to Harry.

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) TheDudeAbides 2008-04-26

  I do like the story, and as I think you said English wasn't your first language I'm cutting some slack, but you've got commas in odd places.
  
  "You can call, me Boss Potter!" for example. There isn't any need for a comma in that at all.

• A Twisted Timeline

  (#) Dragen 2008-07-01

  Another great chpater mate, I do like how the story is going and can't wait to see what happens next. I do like the idea of Harry being a six year mob boss, nice idea.
  
  I do like how Sirius reacted in what Harry did.
  
  I love the payback Harry got on Vernon, nicely done.

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