- Ouch. So what do you say to a fic like this? If it were any other fandom, or any other character, the use of the word "homo" would have sent me running far far away. As it is though, and since it's early Izumi, it didn't do anything but remind me how Izumi has changed in later volumes g
I've actually, um, tried my best to avoid any fic which mentioned the events of that night because that entire first chapter disturbed me more than I'd like to remember, but I took a chance on this fic and I'm glad I did.
The plot itself was predictable* in that it had to strictly follow what was dictated by canon, and while I still don't agree with Izumi's thought processes (even though it's canon ;D), at the same time I think you did a very good job of describing Izumi's inner turmoil, and a great job of expanding on the process which led to its resolution. That part of the manga felt much too rushed to me and it's this fic which has given me more understanding (and, perhaps, sympathy) of the situation.
One question though: data club?
And quibble: I noticed that there are two (three?) times when there are two periods in a row: either one too many to end a sentence properly, or one too few to be an ellipsis. The other quibble I have is that I didn't get the peony image/theme until maybe the third or fourth time I went over the fic. I saw the title (of course), and I read the last line, but for some reason, my eyes skipped over the blush==peony line and I don't know why (but that's my fault, not yours)
Argh, words, clunky groans What I've been trying to say, or explain, is that I enjoyed the fic. Nothing new happened, in terms of action, but I think that what you wrote does put things in a clearer light. Or at least, that because of what you wrote, I can no longer avoid facing the fact that that event really did happen like, um, that.
*Me? Take a cue from the rating keywords? Certainly not! ;3
(#) MightyMaeve 2009-03-19That was brilliant! You dealt with a really intriguing psychological exploration with a deft hand. Your story didn't bludgeon your reader over the head with explanations, but subtly revealed the true fears and other emotions racing through his head. It felt very grounding and 'real.'
And I love the raw emotion: the rage and the shame and the denial! Angst at it's best!
I also liked the thread woven in with the title and theme of the flower meaning shame.
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