- Okay so the beginning was funny! A little off color but funny!
But the last paragraph was really sweet. I like how you brought up the old memories. It really brings the story kinda full circle. Like they really have come so far.
I like the feeling of how'd you put it-And I felt in peace cause in the middle all the chaos that was our lives
That was a really good line.
I know it was just like a little paragraph at the end but it really gave the chap a sweet feeling. But I dont know. Personally I dont trust it... like the calm before the storm...
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