(#) De_Siathuan 2009-11-14Great story, love it. One of the best parts is the way you write fight scenes - sure, I've seen better, but most of them are serious war fics. In super-powered fics, I get Pissed at the constant, eternal, unending posturing. Why, of why, do they never kill people? Or even worse, kill the faceless goons with a textbook perfect one-hit/kill, but just slap the bad bosses around and let them go. RUARH!
Sorry, your fic was just so great that my frustration with the poorly written BS multiplied exponentially. Despite what it does to my enjoyment of the other fics available, keep writing, please.
PS: Cultural attraction - even as "late" as pre-WWII, diet pills were designed to add those extra five kilos "for a full and curvy figure", rather than the opposite. By the same token, in many cultures it is considered attractive, both for men and women to have a considerable gut. Because fat equals plenty of food, equals wealth and/or great skill/respect. Look at the earliest fetility fetishes; to us they look like impressionistic art of really fat women, to the primitive cultures where they were made they represented health and prosperity. Something to think about.
- I'm so happy to see the latest update. Poor Remo is so under-appreciated by Chiun but I guess Harry's business acumen in getting so many people to pay him for the same job just has to be acknowledged.
I agree with a previous reviewer on the sheer imagination in your writing ... it's a crime that you're not getting paid to write.
- I know I'm late, but... I was reading other HP fanfics on another site...
"“Ordure ! rends moi mon corps, charogne !”" This one had me laughing: I can easily imagine Fleur saying that (and it is syntactically correct French ;-p)
"“Petite bite, éjaculateur précoce. Je suis sure que Potter en a une plus grosse, bande mou!”" Bwahahahahahahaha!
I hope that you will have more of those little acts of rebellion from Fleur, because I think I'll have some good laughs :-D (And I hope that you will have Fleur thanking Harry for saving her -- supposing you will have her surviving this -- it may be the only chance Harry will have to try the 37 steps ;-D)
"Chiun had never been so lavish with his praise before." Bwahahahaha! Thanks for the good laugh :-D
(and thanks to Horace Nihil for the French sentences: It's good to read some correct French, and not what is coming from those automated translators)
Please, update soon again!
Author's response- When Horace offered, how could I decline? French from an actual French-type guy has to be better than what I dimly remember from High School French class circa 1970...
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