- Interesting changes to the Tournament, but it's coming across as rushed.
I am still enjoying it, thanks.
Author's responseErik (and noylj et al) Rushed? Not at all. Undeveloped, yes; much more about a few plot elements I wanted to explore, v. little about character, which I've done in over-exacting detail at times before.
- Wonderful story.
Not enough Harry/Hermione time in this chapter. No MoRon troubles, either. Seems you are ignoring certainly story elements.
Harry never learned how to get around Goblins and their wards?
Wouldn't the Slyths be very upset over the pureblood passing out and shitting his pants? Would expect Draco to meet some sock-covered soap bars at the very least--oh, sorry, that is too muggle...
- DrT I must admit that when I first saw this story I wasn't too hopeful, however, having read and enjoyed all of your previous stories I decided to give it a try. I was rather surprised to find that I'm actually quite enjoying it, especially with Draco being in the tournament. Anyway, keep up the good work and I'm looking forward to the next update.
- Using an oath to prove that he wasn't responsible for his selection as a Champion is a great idea. Why didn't Harry do that in the canon? Did he know about Unbreakable Oaths back then, or did they come later?
What did Crouch have to do with Hagrid deciding to clue Harry in to the dragons in the canon? I thought Hagrid did it entirely off his own bat? I guess I've forgotten something?
Poor Draco!! Still, I won't argue with how you wrote his (not) dealing with his dragon - it's consistent with his being an all-talk bully. And the 'entertainment' was funny.
Regarding 'enslaving' Lily, yes, I reckon that's right. Well, exaggerated, but if it was really 'love' that Snape had felt for Lily then he would have wanted to save rescue all three Potters - the people she loved - not just the object of his desire solely.
Author's responseI believe Crouch took credit for prompting 'that oaf Hagrid', but of course he might have been lying!
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