The Last Battle has been fought, and Harry Potter has won. The price, however, has been high. Nearly every person Harry cared for is dead, maimed, or otherwise injured. The magical culture of Br...
- Very good chapter. It felt mostly like a transitional chapter, but the writing quality was superior and it added to the character development. It is interesting to see how your version of Hermione is developing. I look forward to your next update.
Author's responseHow odd, my response to this was posted to a chapter of a different story! Anyway, yes, purely developmental so I'm glad you liked it
- Very nice, I love the part about naturalists, it is a very unique point that I haven't seen in fanfiction before. Keep up the good work!
Author's responseAs I mentioned in the end notes, I've used it twice before (in 'Summer Letters' on Astronomy Towers and 'Transforming Harry' at the Restricted Section)
- I've been following this story on Astronomytower.org and, frankly, I'm not sure what I think of it overall. The reborn!Harry concept is fairly well used, but this is the first time I've seen him overtly using his knowledge to change events. Telling other people about it is... well, close to unheard of for the genre.
It should be interesting to follow how things develop. After all, Harry has a body that isn't quite ready for romance, neither has Hermione at that. I wouldn't be surprised if early knowledge could sour their relationship beyond hope.
Overall, I am interested to see where you are taking this story.
BenRG's Rating: 7/10
Author's responseAlthough I don't make much of it 'on camera' (do to their physical ages) Harry and Hermione get v. close through the start of the 3rd year, which all I've drafted to at this point.
I guess it's a good thing I read v. little on this genre before I started this!
- Hmmmm ... looks like this site doesn't e-mail back any comments you make to our reviews. Oh well. It's still good to get new chapters in accordance with your intended schedule and not delayed by fictionalley. Who have sent out e-mails asking for new staff, by the way; they've apparently lost people and that's why they're slowing down so much.
Shortish chapter (or maybe this site just has smaller print?), but enjoyable. I really like the "Harry and Hermione" kernel you're developing here ... I've said it before, I'll try not to say it again, but the idea of them being friends and working together from scratch - empowered by Harry's abilities and foreknowledge, Hermione trusting him totally as her leader/authority figure - is a very exciting one. I enjoyed seeing the 'relaxed' side of Hermione in this, and got a feeling of the kids' youth that I hadn't picked up in previous chapters. So very good of Harry, too, to think of helping her with her teeth; that's what best friends are for, and gives we readers good feelings.
As usual an interesting "Doctor T" slant on the way the wizarding world integrates - or doesn't - with our muggle one. In particular the analysis of how the extended magical lifespan might directly lead to the entrenched, old-fashioned attitudes of JKR's world; very interesting. Thank you for the chapter.
Author's responseYes, it looks like the previous chpater is finally going to go up tomorrow there. And I think all the chapters are between 3000 & 3400 words or so.
Glad you enjoyed the slant on this chapter. I enjoyed exploring the Grangers' reactions.
(#) Meteoricshipyards 2006-05-17 03:30:05 PMYou always have the most insteresting take on why the magical world dislikes the muggle world. This one is no exception.
I have a bad feeling about Bill & co.
Good story. Looking forward to more.
Author's responseYes, when I wrote this chapter I wasn't sure if I was going to let them just slip by in the end or do something really nasty.
You'll see which in a few chapters!