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Chapter One- Emptiness

by claire13524 3 Reviews

He had messy raven coloured hair and his eyes, usually a sparkling green, were now dull and empty hollows. His clothes were hanging off his pitiful body and his glasses askew. With the combinatio...

Category: Harry Potter - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Angst,Drama - Characters: Dudley,Harry,Petunia Dursley,Vernon Dursley - Warnings: [!] [V] - Published: 2011/10/23 - Updated: 2012/03/03 - 4734 words

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  • Harry Potter and unfamiliar power

    (#) alex9 2011-11-01 10:06:31 AM

    Wow!!!!!
    Amazing story. Can't wait for more. Interesting plot. Would definitely recommend.

    Author's response

    Thanks for reviewing :)
  • Harry Potter and unfamiliar power

    (#) claire13524 2011-11-01 10:22:34 AM

    Thanks for the review :)
  • Harry Potter and unfamiliar power

    (#) Hippothestrowl 2012-03-01 01:47:24 PM

    Good pre-start. Really gets us into Harry's feelings for the start of the story. Good use of letters to convey his isolation yet gives us everyone else's feelings too.

    For some reason I found Hermione's line "Have you done much of your homework" really touching I don't know why. It just seemed so natural yet caring in a different way.

    Author's response

    Yay thank you so much for the review. I'm glad to know someone's enjoying the story. I have developed a habit of squealing if I see there is a new review.
    I spent a lot of time trying to show how Harry was feeling, I was a little concerned I was going over the top or ooc, but knowing you found it OK is well good.
    I thought it was a very typical Hermione line, I imagined her writing the letter to Harry whilst sitting staring at her 5 roll long piece of homework.
    Hope you enjoy the rest of the story.
    New chapter coming in about a week or two.
    Claire xx

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