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Blast from the Past Arc: Mito: Part II
Naruto is given a scroll containing the secrets of making women fall for him, a scroll he uses at first on the women around him but soon on the shinobi world as a whole, giving birth to the Ero-ninja.
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Eroninja
(#) BlackRevenant 2013-09-04
Sad about the Anko situations.
I think Naruto is looking at it the wromg way, I understand what it means to be a dom, but I don't think that Anko IS a true blue dom.
Doms cannot submit. They arent wired that way. Anko has done such more than once. If anything shes a switch, and her role in world of BDSM would be submissive to the dom but dominate over other subs.
I think you are gonna go that route but not entirely sure.
And taboo is always sexy BECAUSE its taboo.
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Thanks for the review. I agree with your opinion on Anko.Eroninja
(#) blackbankai 2013-09-05
I guess that Mito felt really happy being with Naruto.I wonder if Naruto will can help Guren with her problems.Eroninja
(#) pokemaster12 2013-09-05
Not bad. I really don't have much to say for this chapter. I enjoyed seeing how Mito went about becoming a Harem member, but I'm still worried about Naruto's relationship with Anko. Is the trouble they are facing a prelude to what may be some women dropping out of the harem?
I'm also worried about how you tend to hyperfocus on only a few of the harem members. A good deal of the more secondary characters like Tenten, Yugao, Tayuya, Koyuki, Fubuki, Matsurui, Pakura, Karin, Haku, Tsunami, Maki, Yakumo, Yugito and a whole slew of others just seem to take a back seat. They're practically non existent these days. You may want to bring them more into the fold and have them doing something to show that they are still around.Author's response
Thanks for your review.
To your point about the other characters being excluded, I agree partly, but at the same time certain characters do need to fall to the background for a time so that others can be brought to the forefront. Plus some of the ones you mentioned have appeared in the story recently. Karin had a scene in Suna where Pakura and Maki were shown to be part of the council. Yugito just appeared in the chapter Severing Bonds as did Tenten and Haku. Tsunami has appeared in last chapter and will have a scene in the upcoming one. This was one of the reasons I started writing Limelight to combat this complaint since people assume if they don't see a character it means they aren't doing anything. I would love to spend time with every character but then these chapters would grow way to large.Eroninja
(#) Mastercappy 2013-09-05
Good update, but it starting to look like Naruto is face more and more problems of his own making. Up to this point he has be fixing other people's mess in the leaf! Now he can start to focus on the rest of the world. My only problem is that the next chapter is not up yet. Lol! Keep up the good work.Eroninja
(#) Seed00 2013-09-05
I have to agree with pokemaster12. A lot of the women in the pack disappear entirely. You show how Naruto gets together with said harem member, but once that's done they're gone entirely.
The last time we saw everyone together was the aftermath of Naruto's mojo problem and teh discussion to solve said problem. Granted, they can't all get away from their villages but a scene here and there with them would help.
As for Anko, I'm guessing that missing link could be Kurenai, but what are the odds that Anko might try to kill him if he decides to include her best friend in plans.
Hopefully, Naruto learns that each woman has to be handled differently.Author's response
As I mentioned several times I have to disagree with this statement that characters disappear. They might not get a great deal of screen time but they are mentioned and they have appeared.
For instance the Harem gathered several times since the one you mentioned. They did when Kakshi was brought in on the secret of the Harem's existence. They did again just last chapter when Kiyomi discussed her making them ageless.Eroninja
(#) n0mster 2013-09-05
Always great to see a new chapter, I have to admit that this wasn't my favourite chapter, nonetheless it was an enjoyable read.
My main gripe was how easily Naruto and Tsunade were schooled by Mito Uzumaki, admittedly she had the advantage of the Edo Tensei's nigh invulnerability, but it did seem like Naruto even with his mother's assistance was unable to 'match' Mito. I would've thought that the wife of the first Hokage while significantly powerful, wouldn't have been able to defeat Naruto in taijutsu while he was in sage mode. After which, she managed to nearly kill Naruto and siphon out the Kyuubi chakra entirely. Fortunately, Kabuto didn't manage to gain anything from the fight, and both Mito and Guren were brought back to Konoha alive and well.
While I liked how you fleshed out Mito's history and thoughts, I was a little apprehensive about her behaviour. Luckily, Tsunade managed to prevent her from mimicking Goku's/Kukaku's earlier promiscuities, and the end result was her entry into Naruto's harem and the improved relationship between Tsunade and her grandmother. The side effect of improving Naruto's mindset towards incest and the increased wearing away at Kushina's self-control was the icing on the cake.
As for the circumstances with Anko, the tension is certainly ramping up, hopefully their situation will be resolved peacefully and on a positive note. I really don't want to see Naruto lose any of his loved ones, and it seems like this particular relationship has continued to sour. At least, it seems like Naruto is becoming more conscious of his position as head of the harem and that he can't appear to be submissive to anyone. His musings about the hierarchy within the harem certainly has merit and I'm glad that he's decided not to pacify Anko by being sexually submissive to her in order to fulfill her kink. You didn't mention what exactly his and Anko's new status quo is, and I don't think it's 'friends with benefits', especially after the whole issue with Ten-ten and the harem's stance towards relationships with Naruto, and such a status would definitely impact on Naruto's image.
My thoughts on rectifying the relationship between Naruto and Anko would be from Anko's statement about her wanting to explore the kinkier side of sex. Throughout her talks with Naruto, her problem mainly comes from Naruto's disinclination towards being the sub in BDSM, while she herself continues to only imagine herself as the dom. As such, a possible solution (that I think you've already thought up) would be rather than be the dominant partner, Anko could be the submissive and Naruto the dominant, thus allowing her to explore her kinkier side with Naruto. From all her statements, it doesn't appear that she's disinclined to being the sub, so Naruto being the dom during sex would be a possible solution. It would give Anko the 'spice' she craves while allowing Naruto to preserve his 'Alpha' status within the harem.
Anyway, overall, another fantastic chapter and I look forward to your next update.Eroninja
(#) Incandescence 2013-09-06
Ah that was so erotic O_O Seems this story is making full circle, it started off full erotic novel with great character development and then focused on plot development and character development, now it's erotic development and character development more.
This is such an epic story I must say I would happily read anything you write in the future, if you do write something else, please let me know ^_^Eroninja
(#) htmwall 2013-09-09
OK sage,the lemon was good and but lately i felt like the story has became a bit dull,i missed the chapters where naruto seduces the woman,last chapters it felt like women were throwing themselves at him mito,rangiku,naruko,even rin and pakura were almost the same case.
i want to see the old eroninja back where naruto does the seducing part,because for me that build-up is the best part of the story and what made it unique.
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