(#) sapphireblackruby 2006-08-14A very oringinal beginning. I haven't read a new harry/bella story in a long time. Just make the chapters a bit longer and you would be doing great
Author's responseThanks :)
If I make the chapters longer, you'll have to wait longer for them. I'm aiming for 3,000 word chapters posted every weekend, and hopefully i'll be able to keep at it, but I have a really busy week ahead of me, so don't get your hopes up.
- I make it a habit to not read stories in progress, as so many authors will start a story and never finish. Today I find myself in a rather whimsical mood, and so when I saw what looked like an interesting story with nought but a few thousand words, I decided to go ahead and read.
I hope I should be so whimsical more often. The tapestry you have started weaving is detailed and original. I've always found Bellatrix an intriguing character who I would've liked to know more about. Her fall from grace is an refreshing twist from so many stories where she is the Dark Lord's favourite. You write well (in terms both of grammar and verbiage) and I really hope you continue with this story, for as long as you do I'll continue to read it. Well done.
Author's responseThanks for the very thoughtful review :) I avoid WIPs too, usually, so I can understand that. Hopefully, I won't dissapoint you :) At the moment, I have no intention of abandoning this, but who knows what the future brings.
(#) MasterKtulu 2006-08-14I’ve been a huge fan of Harry/Bellatrix stories for a while now, either as a couple or whatever else. This chapter is original, well written and entertaining with many questions left to be answered. And you did all this in the first chapter; something many good and popular Fan Fiction authors aren’t able to do until at least a few more chapters, if at all. I can’t wait to read the second chapter, and I hope it will contain all the same qualities as this one.
Author's responseI hope I'll be up t your expectations :) Thanks for the nice review :)
- I love the Harry/bella ship, I hope this fic turnes out as good as i am hoping for!!!
I liked the first chapter, it's a good introduction, but don't you think even stupid retarded old crabb would think of tring his victim up before he attempted to rape her? I dunno, I suppose it fits in with her escape.
In your summery you say "post seventh..." does this mean it's set after the seventh book or after Harry's seventh year which turned out differently then JKR's.
Also, is it the formating's funny, or is there suppost to be a huge gap between each line of text. It makes te story slightly less easy to read, or thats what i've found.
Anyway, please continue writing as I enjoyed it overall, hope the next few chapters are just as good.
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