"No, Bren..." I gasped. I was so out of breath I couldn't even finish his name. He looked upset, like a kid who had just been told that he couldn't have an ice pop before dinner. "Not here." I gasp...
You know, there are plenty of ways to pick this story up. Like for one thing, you can write about their relationship. Trust me, you could definitely make another chapter. This is a great start. It would be a shame if you stopped.
AWESOME!!! :D :D :D I loved it!!! :3
Wow, thanks. Haven't gotten a new review on this one in like two years... Make sure you read part 2 if you haven't yet-It's called But Its Better If You Do!
One of the best stories I've ever read on here!
Thank you so so so much. You have no idea how much it means that people are still reading this story!
ahh I like it. it was sweet and adorable.
"And the fact that he's got the ability to make root canal fun." how on earth can you make root canal fun?! that is my only question. how... seriously how?!?!?!?! I mean that has got to be painful!!!!!
I really like this story!
I really can't believe that people are still reviewing this story. It's been like seven years, and I have moved on from Panic! At The Disco, but I really appreciate your review. Thank you =)
I like this story. write OTHER (as in not this story but different stories)!!!!!!!!!!! =]
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