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• Black Vengeance - 1

  (#) sweetgirl 2007-01-24

  Interesting story. It seems like it is goingto to be a good one. I hope you update soon. As far as ships go, I vote for Hermione, Cho cried too much for me and she was whiny.

  Author's response

  Thank you for the review and your opinion regarding the ship. I am posting the next Chapter in a few minutes. As for the ship, I will keep the poll open until I come to Chapter 5 or two weeks from now (whichever is later).
  
  Thanks for reading and reviewing.
  Regards,
  Maidros
  

• Black Vengeance - 1

  (#) mathiasgranger 2007-01-24

  I vote for Hermione because I like when she gets in touch with her slytherin side.
  
  Thanks for writing,
  Matt

  Author's response

  Thanks for your review and your opinion regarding the ship. As for the poll, I will keep it open until I come to Chapter 5 or two weeks from now (whichever is later).
  
  Thanks for reading and reviewing.
  Regards,
  Maidros
  
  

• Black Vengeance - 1

  (#) Alorkin 2007-01-24

  A nice twist to both the meeting in the Hogs Head, and the trial's aftermath. Daphne is still an undecided, as was Blaize, until book sux came out. Nott's father was named as a DE in book four, so he likly will have a great many problems if he should decide not to join Voldmort's group.
  I liked your explanation. It makes sense. Voldemrt wouldn't care if his DE's served willingly, as long as they served. His mark would ensure that.
  As for the 'ship', I am dedicatd to the idea of Harry and hermione. She provides the grounding he needs, and he gives her the 'spark' she lacks. Together, the make an unstoppable team. Cho is a 'temp' Yes, she's pretty, but every interaction they have had ends in anger and tears. Not good for a relationship (unless you are Ralph and Alice Kramden!)
  I have often wondered why Dumbles could make prefects of such definately pro-Voldy students as Malfoy and Parkinson.
  Your initial synopsis showing Dumbles as 'ends-justifies-the-means' type of person, is borne out in most of canon.
  I have placed this on my 'alerts' list and eagerly await the next page of
  'Black Vengeance' Alorkin

  Author's response

  Thanks for your review, it was very helpful - the remark about every interview with Cho ending in tears had eluded me. Without spoiling the story, I have plans for Daphne's parents and Nott Sr. in my story. As you mentioned, he will not be happy if his son does not take the mark, and I will be dealing with it in future Chapters.
  
  It seemed funny that Voldemort loves [i]crucio[/i]-ing people and yet the Death Eaters love serving him. At some level, I think most Death Eaters were happy when Voldemort was disembodied. I will be having a more realistic Voldemort - one who controls his followers with a carrot-and-stick policy.
  
  As for the ship, I have plans for both Cho and Hermione in my story. I will leave the poll open for the next two weeks, or until I am at Chapter 5 (whichever is later) and then decide about the ship. JKR's Cho seemed to have a bit of inconsistency, and in any case, Cho standing up for Marietta actually impressed me.
  
  Thanks for reading and reviewing.
  
  Regards,
  Maidros

• Black Vengeance - 1

  (#) DarkeGray 2007-01-24

  Interesting new spin on things. As for the pairing, I will have to go for Hermione, Ron has already shown his ignorance and she wouldn't get with someone as immature as him, so the only real option is Harry. I never really liked Cho too much, she seemed way to whinny and tried to turn Harry into a little Cedric. Anyways, looking forward to more chapters.

  Author's response

  Thanks for reading and reviewing, and your opinion regarding the ship. I will be developing both Hermione and Cho as characters. The next chapter will be up in a few minutes.
  Regards,
  Maidros
  

• Black Vengeance - 1

  (#) grookill 2007-01-24

  This is a good start. What caught my eye was the author note at the beginning. I hope you can make sure that Voldemort follows through with the basic evil overlord creedo. ;-) Just be sure that there aren't any sharks with laser beams.
  
  Personally, 'ship wise, why not both Hermione and Cho. Not at the same time though. Cho, to me, is really Harry's "training ground". He could use Hermione as a trainer (er, ask her for advice about girls) and still fail miserably with a crying Cho. Harry isn't all that stupid, but would he ever figure out that Hermione has been training Harry how to be her boyfriend? Very Slytherin like planning, I should think...
  
  Looking forwards to the next chapter.

  Author's response

  Thanks for reading and reviewing. As for the author's note, LOL! I am a firm believer in the evil overlords' list. I will try to follow it as much as possible.
  
  Your suggestion about both Hermione and Cho is extremely interesting and insightful, but I am not sure I can pull it off. Writing romances is not my strong point, in any case. Thanks for the suggestion though - I will see if it can be worked into the story.
  
  The next chapter will be up in a few minutes.
  Regards,
  Maidros
  

• Black Vengeance - 1

  (#) jabarber69 2007-01-25

  Hey I like your story. I also agree with some of your points. I also have some of my own that I have always wondered about.
  
  1. Why do all the pureblood fanatics like Malfoy sr. who protray themselves as aristocrats and preach all this pureblood nonsense bow and scrap and kiss the very robes of a very insane, very, very crazy and powerhungry maniac who has been proven without a doubt to be just a halfblood!?! and to top it off why do they allow him to torture them constantly and not leave? I wouldnt stay, hell any sane person wouldnt put up with that.
  
  2. How come the wiz world, students, teachers and Harry put up with the insane preachings of a quaker, someone who basically will sacrifice hundreds if not thousands of good decent people to save just one bad and evil type person. Even an idiot knows that someone that is as bad as malfoy jr. isnt going to change unless he wants to. Someone needs to remind dumbydork that you can lead a horse to water but you cant make it drink. if the so called bad people want to change they know where to find dumbydork so in otherwords stop making the good and honest people of the wiz world (especially the studends) suffer at the hands of basically a bully (snape) and then blaming in on the greater good. Hell if you want to talk or do something for the greater good then the best thing that they can do is kill the manipulative old coot dumbydork for the greater good of course, he worse than voldie, just goes about it a different way.
  
  3. Ron is Gryffindors Malfoy. He is just as bad as malfoy jr. he's prejudice, arrogant, does not engage his brain, weakminded and has a temper. He is also one of those people that will never grow up, who is basically the ideal person that voldie looks for in a death eater cause of there jealouy and sef doubt inferior complex and who never ever see anything but black and white, doesnt see or believe that there are any shades of gray!

  Author's response

  Thanks for reading and reviewing and your very insightful remarks regarding the Death Eaters and their relationship with the Dark Lord. I am inclined to believe that Voldemort has a carrot-and-stick system in place. As you say, it would make no sense for someone like Lucius to serve him else. The rewards must be at least worthwhile to some of the Death Eaters. Voldemort would enslave some Death Eaters, but not all, although all must feel the dangerous life they are leading.
  
  As for Ron being the Gryffindor Malfoy, it struck me as ironic that there are only three dictatorships in the wizarding world - headed by Voldemort, Fudge and Dumbledore. The Weasleys follow Dumbledore as blindly as the Death Eaters follow Voldemort. Your remarks about Ron are only too true - there is only black and white for Ron.
  
  As for changing the Malfoy juniors of the world, I am inclined to think that it is just the cover story. Dumbledore must have better reasons than wide-eyed naivete that he can change the natures of everyone - I intend to show Dumbledore's reasons for his tolerating Snape and Malfoy. Putting hundreds of people at risk is obnoxious.
  
  Thanks for your very insightful review - it was fantastic. The next chapter will be up in a few minutes.
  Regards,
  Maidros
  

• Black Vengeance - 1

  (#) DrT 2007-01-25

  I look forward to seeign where you might take this.
  
  "T"

  Author's response

  Thanks for reading and reviewing.
  Regards,
  Maidros

• Black Vengeance - 1

  (#) Sch1av0na 2007-01-25

  Interesting start to this story. I can see how this could start to change a lot of views among most of the DA members if they train and get to know Theodore and Daphne.
  
  As far as ships go, I'd like to see it be Harry/Hermione or Harry/Daphne much more than Cho. While she was a crush, the only thing they really had in common was Quidditch and later the DA. You would really have to change and flesh out her character to make her good for Harry.
  
  I'm looking forward to more of this story, hopefully soon.

  Author's response

  Thanks for reading and reviewing. It struck me as rather strange that none of the Slytherins would dare to approach the `Light' side to negotiate. If the problem is Dumbledore, the natural course would be to deal with someone like Potter. As for Daphne and Theo, they are already a `couple' and they are acting to a premeditated plan.
  
  I intend to flesh out Cho quite a bit - she will have a rather important part to play in the whole saga.
  
  Thanks for your opinions regarding the ship. The next chapter will be up in a few minutes.
  Regards,
  Maidros
  

• Black Vengeance - 1

  (#) Black_s_Phoenix 2007-01-25

  Harry/Cho... you have a chance to develop her into a good character instead of the way JKR butchered her in OoTP. She made CHo seem to be an airhead without having any of the attributes that is supposed to be a Ravenclaw. It seemed as if Cho was more a hufflepuff the Ravenclaw and that does not make sense since she is the Ravenclaw Seeker. Hermione best serves Harry as his best friend and should be kept that way so thta she could develop a relationship with an intellectual that will challenge her mentally.

• Black Vengeance - 1

  (#) Black_s_Phoenix 2007-01-25

  Harry/Cho... you have a chance to develop her into a good character instead of the way JKR butchered her in OoTP. She made CHo seem to be an airhead without having any of the attributes that is supposed to be a Ravenclaw. It seemed as if Cho was more a hufflepuff the Ravenclaw and that does not make sense since she is the Ravenclaw Seeker. Hermione best serves Harry as his best friend and should be kept that way so thta she could develop a relationship with an intellectual that will challenge her mentally.

  Author's response

  Thanks for reading and reviewing. I am inclined to agree with you about Cho - she got a raw deal in OotP. She will have a rather important part to play in the present story - I intend to make her a Ravenclaw. Thanks for your opinion about the ship. The next chapter should be up in a few minutes.
  Regards,
  Maidros
  
  

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