(#) jerseygirlxx 2007-05-06She really does come off sweet and shy and innocent! But Im still like WTF? You left off in the middle of a car crash didnt you?! Ive got to go back a chapter...brb.
Author's responseyeah, i know but i didn't want the traditional 'oh they're saved, ya'. i wanted to do something different, and i thought it's a good idea to skip to the concert and you get that it was a close call but they got saved because they're at the concert almost getting sky killed again.
(#) jerseygirlxx 2007-05-06okay so when you said it picked up speed and tilted side to side... did that mean it narrowly missed them??? cause then the whole to be continued part made it look like it wasnt over... Im confused... I so though this chapter was picking up whre that left off... Anyway.. lets say that it did miss them (and you totally gyped me out of that scene!) and now there at the concert... I liked it... I could see Sky being totally freaked out... Her mom was right to baby her! lol! But when exactly did Gee drink? after he lost her? rrgh! what did he give up looking and was like oh maybe I'll have a beer... Rrrgh! she shouldve slapped him.. But no.. that wouldnt have been sky like at all... Shes gonna foolishly put herself out there thinking she can help him... shakes head at sky I wonder how many times he can burn her before she gives up....----xoxo (I dont know if thats where you were going with your story but please do cause I hate happy endings!) =)
Author's responselol no, he drank sometime in the past couple of days. but the stress and emotional things caused him to come clean now, he's not that obnoxious. maybe i should have sky lash out at Mikey for not telling her gee is drinking again..hmm
(#) jerseygirlxx 2007-05-07Yeah that cool... I love bad boys though... Hell I love all boys! anyway... It was cool that you skipped through the 'accident' scene. I thought maybe ficwad screwed up the order or something... It did give it a different feel.. like you said obviously they were okay or they wouldnt be at the concert... It also works out good cause you can always go back and refernce the scene when you need to. Since there was no dialog written. You can pretty much make up what you need when you need it... Like lets say next week theyre having an oh so tender moment she could be like oh remembering what he said in the car... you know or the opposite of that where shes like 'damn you - you promised me in the car that blah blah... You know what Im saying. Dont be afraid to use that when you need it...also things like that the other charac. may have said to each other... Thats what I do... Its good to leave some openings in the story so you can go back and fill them in, just dont skimp on details! whens the next chap coming????----xoxo
Author's responsei love them too but not if they go drink instead of looking for me...but gee is ok, he loves sky!
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