Categories > Celebrities > My Chemical Romance
I remember...
46 ReviewsFrank/Gerard oneshot. PG-13 pretty much for boy/boy, implied-ish sex, and sadness i guess if its really sad at all... not so good, but ok i guess...
Reviews
-
I remember...
(#) mcr_lover103 2007-05-30 02:03:39 PM
oh my god, that is soooo sad!! you made me cry -
I remember...
(#) jerseygirlxx 2007-05-30 02:05:00 PM
this was so sad!! Ilike how you started each paragraph the same. It gave it a nice flow. But then at the end you lost it a little. Each time you said I remember----(It was a specfic time or look or word) but then the last 3 or so paragraphs dont start that way. uh one says I remember when he got so weak and another is :I remember how soft and gentle blah blah... I think if you change the wording slightly it will keep the flow better. ( I remember the day he got so weak they wouldnt let him leave the hosp...)
But really... very sad...Why dont they have a sad rating point??----xoxoAuthor's response
i changeded it a little, hope it helps -
I remember...
(#) jerseygirlxx 2007-05-31 04:09:13 AM
I still think the last one that says I remember 'the week' dosent fit right... Each other reference is to a specific moment in time. I think thats what makes it so powerful. Little moments in time. Thats all we are. But 'a week' sounds like too long. Id change it to be more specific. Make it a specific felling or moment. The more specific the better. (I remember the feel of his kiss; or I remember the look in his eye as we stared out the window. he wanted to go home blah blah... ) I dont know theres so many ways and you've done an amazing job on this....
Dont EVER write in your summary that you dont think your writing is good!----xoxoAuthor's response
uhhh, ill think about it but i dont really get how to change it..
thanks for your comment glad u liked! =) -
I remember...
(#) MCR_dynamite 2007-05-31 08:35:19 AM
That was seriously sad and beautiful! It was really sweet all the way through it and brought tears to my eyes. I love the way you wrote it. How you put at the beggining of the memories, I remember when...and at the end, I was -- and he was --
I absolutely loved that story!!! -Jessie xox -
I remember...
(#) Fewli-xx 2007-06-01 04:34:15 AM
... :'/ Made me wanna cry.Author's response
good or bad? mm, thanks for reading thoz! -
I remember...
(#) lups 2007-06-02 12:00:35 AM
ohmygod. that was simply GREAT. i could actually see all of it like screen shots, youknow? like photographs... AND... it took me to the edge of tears at the end...Author's response
lol thanks i was hoping youd b able to picture it! =) -
I remember...
(#) wtfwhore 2007-06-08 09:59:50 AM
OMG this was so sad.
It was GREAT!
I LOVED IT, I ALMOST CRIED.
it would of been weird, because i'm at school, in computer class.lol. -
I remember...
(#) RyanRossIsLove 2007-06-20 06:59:51 PM
it made me cry. then every one looked at me weird on the train. but, wow...it was beautiful. -
I remember...
(#) toasty_vampire 2007-06-26 09:09:42 PM
Wow. This was...amazing. It was sad, and it really touched me. Great job on it; it was thought-provoking and gentle in it's simplicity. Two thumbs up, keep on writing please!!!