A look at just where Ed got that foul mouth of his. Rated for cussing, of course. One-shot.
AWW! SO CUTE! I can't think of anything that could be improved.
Author\'s Response: Thanks. ^^;; The plotbunny kind of attacked my brain, so there it is. Glad you liked it.
gigglesnort That makes so much sense!
Author\'s Response: Doesn't it just? ^^
(#) Ardwynna 2006-01-07 06:15:59 PM
Corruption of the young! Bad daddy! XD
Author\'s Response: Isn't he just? ^^;; Maybe it's a good thing he left before he got to Alphonse...
(#) Godaime 2006-01-16 10:37:46 AM
Amusing beyond all reason. It's sweet to see stories about the younger Elric brothers - and funny ones.
However, the way you wrote Ed's speech was a bit disorienting, like 'sowwy' and such. That may be how it sounds, but it throws the reader for a moment. Now, adding apostrophes where sounds are left out, or changing the grammar to sound more childish, is fair game and can be easily understood.
Author\'s Response: Thanks for the critique; I originally debated a bit about how I was going to do that. It's really difficult trying to write for someone who's about eighteen months old or so, and I wasn't sure how to go about representing it. Thanks for the suggestions; I'll see if I can get it to flow better.
(#) FullMetal Freak 2006-02-09 06:27:39 PM
Awwwwww, that was so kawaii!!! That totally makes perfect sense!!! Great story, i loved it!!!
Author\'s Response: ^^; I'm glad I'm not the only one who likes fluff every now and then. Glad you liked it. ^_^
LOL!! Too cute!!!
Author\'s Response: Yeah, that's what happens when baby!Ed gets in my head. Too bad Al wasn't old enough to really remember their father, huh?
snicker It's true, too. Kids hear everything...
I liked the glimpse we got of the Elric household before Hoeinheim left. It emphasizies how "normal," they were, even though Hoeinheim and his children were anything but normal.
Amazing story, I think you should keep writing humorous stories, you've made my day.