Bob had a shitty ex girlfriend. She cheated on him, and it left him scarred for life. He meets Lilly, the new girl from England, and before they're even friends, he knows he wants to be with her fo...
(#) shortygirl 2010-11-21 07:44:33 PMI think this an awesome story so far, but i wasn't able to read chapters 6 and the rest...ficwad isn't leting me go to the chapters
Author's responseAll the other chapters were taken down because this fic was written about 3 years ago originally, and I' in the process of rewriting it. Ficwad must still have the other chapters visible in the story index. I'm sorry if that caused any confusion.
I'll update this week, though.
(#) xDinoRawrx 2011-01-30 05:12:05 PMI really like this story :)
But Lilly doesn't sound that English.
- We don't really use "soft drink" in everyday language, we'd just say juice, and instead of soda, we just use the name brand.
- We don't have an official "tea time", it's just an afternoon snack if we feel like it.
- In the next chapter Lilly says "cell phone", In England it's a "mobile phone".
Other than that, it's really great! If you need any help with Englishness, feel free to ask :)
Author's responseThanks for the lesson, but I was actually born in Liverpool and raised in Swansea, so your help is unnecessary.
I have ALWAYS called them "soft drinks", my family always had a set tea time, and I've been in America for as long as I've had a cell phone, so forgive me that one.
Other than that, please feel free to stop reading my story if you have such a problem with how I have chosen to make my character speak. :)