(#) Terdwilicker 2008-02-12Good, but too short. This battle needs more details. I recommend editing them in. Same with details on his date with Luna. Add another page for each part and you'll have the right level of detail, I think.
Author's response- I'll look into that...
- Short but sweet. I'm interesting in hearing Dumbledore's opinion on if Harry is going dark or not. As well as Dumbledore's response to Harry suddenly becomming a kickass fighter. I imagine he'll try to do something about it supposedly for the greater good but wind up doing more harm than good by holding the Potters back like the Dumbledore of cannon.
- Well, I've read Harry meets fem!Harry stories before, but never one when essentially all the characters' genders are inverted (the whole 'Dark Lady' thing makes me laugh, although Lucius has always been a bit effeminate IMHO).
So! Voldemort himself (or, rather the Hogwarts AI's simulation of Voldemort) is training Harry. No wonder he is suddenly so good at violence. His struggle with the Dark, his own Dark, is probably just beginning.
This is an original story and I will be looking out for future chapters.
BenRG's Rating: 8/10
Author's response- Lucile is much more manly than Lucius, true.
- Harry's accidental creation of a Voldemort shade will lead to other things...
(#) slayersfan01 2008-02-13Nice but still too short. Anyway, I loooove this fic. So original and so exciting. You've refreshed my interest in Harry Potter fics. I'm only finding cliche fics out there now and this is the only fic that is original I've read lately. Please keep it up and update more and with longer chapters!
Also, how come on the last chapter Dobby seems to still be male? Does the gender switch only apply to humans?
Author's response- Yeah, I've decided (just this second, considering your question)that it does.
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