- "I" think you have written well and that the story is well worth the time to read it.
Having already read "Marriage Contracts", Technomage, "Businessman", and "Distaff Side", I should not have been surprised.
Your ability to take the cannon and find new ways to look age it is what fanfic is all about, but I really liked how you addressed things that really nagged in the cannon: McGongols and Dumbledores blinkers to what they don't what to see; Ron and Hermine's to major obvious opposites: brains, talent, willingness or not to work, etc\; and the fact that Harry and Hermione were a lot closer and more balanced match; AND that that the only reason Harry did not die on a suicide mission with Moldishorts was the Dumbledore died early of a bad case of stupidity.
I loved your your no shots fired, no friends and companions lost ending. I have been fanfic's for a couple years, and think that ending is unique.
Again, thanks for a very enjoyable read.
May the MUSES always be with you!!!
(#) siledubhghlase 2009-03-27Excellent and very imaginative. When Mr. Weasley addressed his family in that first council after Ron and Ginny had been arrested, I actually cried for that poor man. He was heartbroken and his wife was perfectly unrepentant.
I was wondering if overexposure to the control potion might have damaged Ron's and Ginny's minds and I was right. After all, drug abuse destroys the mind, the body, the heart, the soul, and the family.
I was glad to see that in a very brief moment of clarity, Ron sort of redeemed himself. For a bried, shining moment, the training the DA offered him paid off.
I was hoping for the same for Ginny, but no. She was just too far gone. I was glad to see Neville come into his own, too.
(#) kaptin_hippy 2009-04-24Truly a supurb story. Great plot line along with terrific writing made this a piece of art. I plan to I've read the rest of your work as soon as possible. Also, I've read Kinsfire's work and it's garbage compared to your's. I personally don't find him "great and powerful".
(#) noreenklose 2009-05-13Excellent story! I thoroughly enjoyed it from Chapter 1 to the end. Tom's losing his magic, which ended his life, AND all of his DE's going with him, was a masterful stroke!
The ending was wonderful. Thank you for writing. Please continue with your stories--you are a good writer.
- Your use of magic was certainly better than JKR's. Would have loved to Herms or Daphe as MoM, though I always sort of saw Harry and Herms in the DoM, if they had to be in the ministry at all. Did Daphne or Astoria have a son to carry the Greengrass name?
I love coming back to this story and almost everyone get what they deserve (unlike canon).
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