Review for The Suicidal Immortal 2

The Suicidal Immortal 2

(#) Ithilwen 2007-06-12

A "Hun" is a member of a tribe that plagued Rome. I think you mean the term of endearment, "Hon."

"imple chores, and took care of them" You don't need that comma because "and took care of them" is not an independent clause.

Cigarette has two each of e's and t's.

Face like a shower curtain? That's new...

Author's response

thanks, not sure why my spell check didn't catch that cigarette error but oh well. i would have fixed it faster but i have been having a lot of trouble getting on ficwad lately