Review for Dawn of Time

Dawn of Time

(#) princessofoyownworld 2006-06-28

decent Plot, but you could stand to put a spaces between where the people talk. And a few more discripteve words. Like:

"Who are you!" Belle screamed as a wolf like deamon jumped out from the pitch black shodows. The demon was composed comletely of fire, excepted for gleaming birght yellow eyes. The deamon knocked her down, her waist length blonde hair was spread around and her welectric baby blue dress had multiple tears in it.

"You can not take that book." The demoned replied in a deep menicing voice as he tried to take the old dogeared book away from Belle, but Belle hung on with all her strength. Even the demon could see the determination in her baby blue eyes.