Review for Virtual Reality

Virtual Reality

(#) fruit_addict 2007-06-26

good chapter! a few spelling/grammer mistakes but pretty good. I didn't expect Josh to be a smoker AND swear. I'm not quite sure how he came to be a smoker since he spends all his time in the basement and has no friends I guess I figured that he had no influence to become a smoker. Anyways I better read the rest of the story!