The story is going along at quite a slow pace, and i find a lot of spelling errors in the story. Also, i've noticed that you've a lot of 'is driving him insane' phrase in the story. Your choice of words can be changed, and the story can be improved if you can use better words and not the same over and over again. It gives me quite a...boring feeling, because there are little conversations, and little actions, but with much more practice, you can do very well. ^^