haha wow...too many funny parts...
i got way absorbed in this story which is...really good...cuz i can sorta imagine my being there, haha!
belle seems a lot like you. and i love brendon's outbursts. but then again, i love everything brendon brendon brendon so whatever, right? lol.
i think you've got best comebacks with lines and stuff...they're all so perfectly written.
although i think you can (technically) work on going back to edit and stuff, i know that this is just a side thing from 'it was just for the experience' so i won't be too much of a bother about that. :)
xoxo
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