i like the story line.
i think its awesome and original,
but i must say,
the dialouge is completely unrealistic.
i mean, in the begening, megan hugs gerard after saying two sentences to him??
and then frank HAS to mention how old his sister is turning to a complete stranger?
then, he just randomly asks 'whats your name?'.
no one in real life would ever do all those things, so it makes it hard to believe.
i dont mean this as an insult, but are you in 6th grade? im just wondering cause your writting level seems to be in about that age range.