Review for Harry's Return

Harry's Return

(#) silverleafhp 2007-09-09

Not bad. Spelling and word format needs a little work but other than that I don't see to many glaring problems.

It seems you have put some thought into the plot and that's always a plus.

Only problem I see is that you are rushing it a little bit. I realize that you want to get to the action bits quickly, but sometimes it's good to just set up a scene first and let the story flow from there.

Bottom line is that you are trying and the more you write, the better you will get. So keep it up.