Not bad. Spelling and word format needs a little work but other than that I don't see to many glaring problems.
It seems you have put some thought into the plot and that's always a plus.
Only problem I see is that you are rushing it a little bit. I realize that you want to get to the action bits quickly, but sometimes it's good to just set up a scene first and let the story flow from there.
Bottom line is that you are trying and the more you write, the better you will get. So keep it up.