nice start of a story. Your writing might not be shakespeare yet, but it isn't so bad that you have to bash yourselve in an authors note ;)
Anyway, i'll say more about the plot and characters when i have something more to review, since at the moment it is still a trifle confusing (though that is perfectly fine for the start of a longer story).
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Thanks.
My outline will take me to about 35 chapters at about 3-4 K.
I hang some at DLP, where i bash others wildly. I just thought i'd be fair8-).
Thanks.
My outline will take me to about 35 chapters at about 3-4 K.
I hang some at DLP, where i bash others wildly. I just thought I'd be fair8-).