awesome! Personally, I think that lots of dialogue is good for a story, and there certainly wasn't too much in that chapter. It was fantastic! ;)
hah. i can picture it... but it's a little... odd. It makes him look paler :P
-off to read next chappy-
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LOL.
That's what I was thinking. About the pale thing in all. I'm not sure. I like dialogue in a story, just not A LOT! I sometimes prefer descriptions. But, thank you lots for the great reviews!