OK, I have to be a bit more critical than others. Your story is all over the place. There's not a real flow to it. It starts off with Hermione, Ginny and Luna. Enter Harry with Giant with blonde dreadlocks and mention of pictures of two other girls then to blown up number four, assuming that they are going back to school. Harry at Leaky Caldren and Gabrielle. There's no flow or time stamps or anything resembling a real story going on here. In reading the first chapter, I'm a little lost as to what is really going on. I'm lost on when things are happening. Is he reliving some things while getting ready to go back to school. It's somewhat set up to be a Harry/Harem pairing with a Manipulative!Dumbledore subplot. I don't really look towards spelling errors because we're human and that's what editors get paid for to proof read and fix. :) I'll read the next chapter and review.
Geovanni Luciano