I will reply to your request for feedback, so here goes:
I like your story, a lot. I found it because I searched your name, as I have your story Sapphic Curiosities bookmarked. I have enjoyed that story, since it has opened up concepts new to me, and I have always liked expanding my horizons. In your current story I am part way through it, I like the abuse that you have Hermione placing on Malfoy and snape, they sooo deserve it. I wouldn't mind seeing Hermione castrate and destroy either Malfoy, as bloodily as possible, and THEN take them to court and claim damages against them.. but that's just one of my plot bunnies. In finishing, I would say
I like your writing style and the internal dialogues going on
its a shame that Hermione can't help Luna in her search and protection of her belongings, give the girl a personal security or something.. Doesn't matter I guess, I will stay with you reading whatever you write until iot's finished, I will even review again if it helps encourage you to write. Hope you get your computer problems sorted out, I just found out the need for a new MB in one of my systems.. more $$ out the door
TimW