I like your idea, I think you could do lots with it and it sounds promising! Though maybe you should work on making the chapters a little longer? I personally prefer it when there's more to read. But hey, that's just me. Keep writing!
Author's response
Heyy =]
Thanks for your comment, i appreciated it.
Yeah i am going to try and make them longer..i have one chapter coming up that's very detail but also very "sexual"
Hope you like it.
Charl
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