Hmm, I like the way this chapter went. Harry and Tracey are starting to really care for each other, it shows in the care and concern they have for each other. I do love the manipulations by Dumbledore, making promises he doesn't have the authority to make. It's interesting that in addition to making a number of promises to the Weaseleys, he also made a contradicting one to Hermione; what a pity he had to mention that while everyone was in earshot, I don't think that's going to endear him to the Weaseleys. Somehow, though, that may not be soon enough to save Bill from getting terminated; I do hope that finding out how Albus' has played with them wakes him up.
It's a great read of a chapter, but it does need a bit of cleanup, mostly of homonym or near-homonym confusion. For example, "... head over heals ..." should be "... head over heels ..." and when describing Tracey's outfit, it should be "blouse", not "blows".
I'm looking forward to finding out just what Susan was talking to Padma about and what, exactly, Madame Bones was anticipating/dreading.
Author's response
Ah yes those. Their a bit amusing when you point them out. Thats the downside of not having a beta. Looks for a pot of coffee plus it doesn't help being a bit tired before posting it up either.