I like this variation on the Harry has a marriage contract plot line. It progresses a little too fast for me but then I was a bit slow in proposing myself.
The other thing I really enjoy is Bill getting into trouble with Gringotts I've always wondered just how he managed to be loyal to both them and the Order. There just had to be conflicts like you highlighted in this chapter. I can't wait for the next one... Maybe fast paced is good .
Thanks for sharing your vision with us.
Scruffy